MSFV Blog Critique Tour

Last week, Authoress, from the ever-fabulous Miss Snarks First Victim website, ran a fun little logline contest on Twitter. (For my non-writer friends, a logline is a one sentence summary of a book or film.) Winners would get the chance to participate in a Blog Critique Tour. The tour itself promised to bring an onslaught of visitors voicing their honest opinions. And as we writer-types know, any feedback, even the brutal truth which brings tears to our eyes, is worth listening to. Critiquers are entered in a drawing of their own, for a 15 page line edit by Authoress herself (that's her to your right). Each critique equals 1 entry into the drawing. 

Talk about a win-win situation! I figured, what the heck? Couldn't hurt, ya know? Before my nerves could get the better of me, I hit the Tweet button. 

And then I started reading all the other submissions. 

Oh, my gosh, guys. Talk about talent! In case you missed the logline frenzy that hit Twitter, there are some amazing books waiting to hit your bookshelves. Take my word for it, start saving your pennies now, because you'll be spending a ton very soon. 

As luck would have it, Authoress plucked my logline, along with 9 others, from Twitter-sphere obscurity. What in the world did I get myself into?!  

So I humbly present to you my logline, and first 250 words of Assassin, P.I. - my noir-inspired Romantic Suspense novel. 

Logline: 

The vigilante justice business gets mighty complicated 

when the killer you’re tracking . . . 

might turn out to be you.

Intrigued? Want more? 

Here are the first 250 words of Assassin, P.I.

When Jack awoke that morning, he had no idea that by the end of the day he’d sign his own death warrant and seal it with a kiss. Just another unfortunate schmuck about to get played. By a dame, no less. A pretty dame with pretty legs and an even prettier mouth.

“Mark my words, Jack, you’ll be back on the streets tracking a killer by the end of the week.”
And Frankie was always right.

***

“I need your help, Mr. Gaines.”

Jack stifled a groan, refusing to look at the woman who graced his doorway. It always started like that. Some broad would waltz into the office begging for help. Well, not this time. He was through being a sucker with muscles for every pretty dame who had a sad sob story to tell.

“We’re closed. Go away.” He tugged the fedora lower and kicked his feet up on the desk. Pretending to read, he peered over the paperback to watch the woman move for the coatrack, her stride restricted by the pencil skirt she wore. She shrugged the coat from her shoulders, revealing an hourglass figure draped in expensive clothes. The cream blouse scarcely concealed the lacy bra and the ample breasts beneath. His type of woman.

“Sign says otherwise,” the woman replied, undeterred. Her voice tickled a memory in the dark recesses of his brain.

“Pretty legs, pretty legs,” Jack’s parrot squawked.

“Shut up, Shamus,” Jack and the woman commanded simultaneously.

That voice.

Those legs.

Angie.

That's all I'm allowed to share with you today, folks. Sorry! Now it's your turn to give me your feedback. Each critique you leave equals 1 entry in a drawing for a 15 page line edit. Good, bad, or brutal, I'm all ears. 

When you're done, click here to return to MSFV to check out the other winners and their blogs.

J.J. Devine

Now available on Amazon

Come back tomorrow when I help fellow Soul Mate author and Romance Weekly Blog Hop peep, J.J. Devine celebrate the release of her new paranormal romance, Into the Darkness, which is available right now on Amazon.com. Consider this your official invitation to J.J.'s release party, where she'll be giving away fun prizes. Click here to join the party. See y'all tomorrow!